[lideux]

最初由 渐渐 发布
Well written! A few comments:

1) Never start a sentence with "but". Some sentences also need to be re-structured.
2) If your intention is to give this letter to the school administrative staff, use "you" instead of "we" just because it is more appealing.
3) Last 2 paragraphs can be combined, and ease up on the emotional slogans.
4) Be assertive, and use facts rather than emotions.

渐渐居然抽空为我们评稿，太好了，一直都很佩服渐渐的语言能力，想跟你学习学习，能具体讲讲需要re-structured的句子吗？离开学校时间长了，很多语法都已用得不够确切，肯定会有想的不周到的地方，渐渐有空的话，再给俺指导指导吧，谢啦！

[oread]

No, no, not 指导, but discussion.

[一直受压抑]

最初由 渐渐 发布
No, no, not 指导, but discussion.

还挺客气，让我等惭愧

[龙无忌]

最初由 渐渐 发布
No, no, not 指导, but discussion.

确实很有水平,别谦虚了, 才女啊!!!

[itflyer]

最后谁来定个稿？差不多就可以打印了。。。

[coconut]

[quote]最初由 渐渐 发布
Well written! A few comments:

1) Never start a sentence with "but". Some sentences also need to be re-structured.
2) If your intention is to give this letter to the school administrative staff, use "you" instead of "we" just because it is more appealing.
3) Last 2 paragraphs can be combined, and ease up on the emotional slogans.
4) Be assertive, and use facts rather than emotions.


[/QUOT]
个人建议，
1.我觉得ludeux最后的口号很impressive，我建议保留，因为这是倡议书，可以用emotion来打动人的。
2.这个倡议书可以印多些，午饭时间在食堂散发，因为有些人虽然是说法语的，但挺热心的，没准会同意签字，这样我们就能争取到更多签名了。

[coconut]

最初由 itflyer 发布
最后谁来定个稿？差不多就可以打印了。。。

[coconut]

给大家通报一下好吗?

[itflyer]

最初由 coconut 发布
给大家通报一下好吗?

最近忙得一塌糊涂。我觉得还是由你和渐渐、ludeux定稿吧？

[moose]

I sent an e-mail to the university information center two weeks ago. In the e-mail I complained the French lanaguage problem of the website, especially the "symboise". Today I got the reply from a technician who receirved my e-mail. He is just responsible for the student computer accounts, and does not have the right to change the website language, but he has transfered my e-mial to the director.

Now, I get the phone number and e-mail of the director who is responsible for the wholed department of Information and Public Relation Service. I was told that maybe he can help to do something if we Chinese students all complain to him about the language problem of the website.

Suggestion: All of the Chinese students send e-mail or call him as soon as possible! His e-mail and phone number are shown as following:

L'équipe du SIRP
Claude Boudreau
Directeur par intérim
(819) 595-3960
Claude.Boudreau@uqo.ca

[itflyer]

最初由 moose 发布
I sent an e-mail to the university information center two weeks ago...

Suggestion: All of the Chinese students send e-mail or call him as soon as possible! His e-mail and phone number are shown as following:

L'équipe du SIRP
Claude Boudreau
Directeur par intérim
(819) 595-3960
Claude.Boudreau@uqo.ca

Thank you MOOSE.

I sent a email to him and attached a modified appealing letter on Thursday, but have not got any response yet. Maybe have to start this campaign soon.

[itflyer]

Dear Sir,

Thank you very much for your letter and concern for the Website. The University is currently studying the situation surrounding English language programs and services at the UQO.

For the time being we do not have the resources to develop a multilingual Website. We will be reviewing the English section of the Website this Fall, this will however be limited to course descriptions and presentation of the University.

Again thank you for your concern about English services at UQO.

Sincerely,

Claude Boudreau
Directeur, Bureau de la promotion des programmes
Directeur par intérim, Service de l'information et des relations publiques

[playman]

Let's take this righteous action together. Just sent an e-mail to Claude.

[itflyer]

别再给他发邮件了，看来没用。最近准备打印出来然后就行动了。

[itflyer]

这就是最后的终稿了。
共打印了4份，MBA、PMP各2份， 得想个办法把2份给COCONUT的MBA。。。

Dear President:

We would like to ask you to consider a project to create an English-version web site for our university.

UQO is a famous French-speaking university with a few graduate programs to be taught in English, such as, MPM, MBA, CMA etc. These programs have grown rapidly in recent years in that more and more non-French speaking students and/or prospective students are attracted to this program. These students are expecting the university to provide special services for them. Having an English-version web site is one of the expectations.

There are two reasons for such a request. First, the non French-speaking students, specifically the minority students like us who are not grown in the French-speaking environment, are difficult to utilize the information from the UQO's website, especially the "symbiose" that is provided only by French, due to lack of capability of using French language. As a result, the current French-version web site fails to be fully unitized.

Secondly, the administrative staff and the faculty have to take extra time to repeat explaining the information that the web site has already addressed, in English, to us who don’t understand French. If there is an English version for our web site, the staff and the faculty will be able to save the time and conduct their core businesses. As a result, the staff and the faculty will be more productive.

In addition, a well-informed English version of the website will improve UQO’s image and help it to win an international reputation. As a result, more people from different cultural and ethical backgrounds will be able to apply the school. A larger enrollment will then result in more subsidies and funding from governments and large companies.

With regards to the above, it is strongly recommended that UQO provide an English version of the website of the university in the foreseeable future.

We appreciate your attention on this issue.


Yours faithfully!


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