CFC 渥太华华裔高中应届毕业生奖学金-2013 - 第二阶段: 评审

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My life so far has been taking on challenges one after another. Born in China, I moved to Japan with my family at six. After living there for eight years during which I experienced learning a new language and culture, my family decided to move again - this time to Canada. At 14, learning two new languages was much harder than it had been before. Everyday became a struggle. Everything - from taking notes to talking with friends - struck me with the pain of not knowing English and French. Slowly I worked my way up, however, and slowly I absorbed the languages. I did not hesitate to put extra effort into English, French and academics in general, because that was the best way for anyone to learn new languages, and the only way for me to do well in school. I might have sacrificed the more fun things I could have done in my teenage years, but I am proud to have gone through the hard work.

Even though academics have always been a priority for me, I never wanted to limit myself to it. Throughout my high school years, I have played competitive table tennis, with achievements such as representing Montreal in Jeux du Quebec, a provincial athletic event and coming to the fourth place in the Quebec Junior Championship. I also have various volunteer experiences at places such as festivals, where I helped run events, a refugee house, where I used my own experience to help new comers/refugees to settle down in Canada. Moreover, I have been working at Kumon, a learning centre for children, for the past two years. There, I mark worksheets, teach children math and reading, talk to parents, enter data into computer, etc. These things helped me acquire organizational and communication skills. All the extracurricular activities have been challenging, but everyone of them has improved me in some ways.

One other challenge that I'm facing right now is raising my little brother, who was just born one and a half year ago. Because my dad works in China, I often have to help my mom look after him. And that task has become increasingly difficult as he grows and becomes more active. For example, when my mom is cooking, I have to babysit him and draw his attention. When he is sick and cries during night, I often have to wake up to help my mom. It goes without saying that his presence has greatly affected my life, but these days I start to think that this experience can have benefits to me. Like any challenges I mentioned earlier, this one too, should help me become a stronger, more knowledgeable and responsible person.

Having gone through obstacles, I have confidence in myself to do well in University. Whatever challenges I'll have to face, I'm ready.


第1.5代

这是一篇朴实无华的ESSAY,反应的是标准的第1.5代小移民的生活。。让人感动。。非常好强懂事的小同学。。

你面对的各种挑战不是OBSTACLES而是历练。。祝这位小同学大学生活愉快!
 
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As an active member of my high school and neighbourhood, I believe that the CFC Scholarship can help me achieve my career goals as I pursue a business education at the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.

In high school, I excelled in my rigorous classes. I obtained the top marks in a variety of courses including science, Canadian history, strings music, geography, French, European history, and statistics. To demonstrate my interest in the sciences and social sciences, I sought enrichment by completing six Advanced Placement exams in addition to my curriculum requirements: English Language and Composition, European History, Statistics, Biology, Macroeconomics, and Microeconomics. I also participated in science competitions across Canada—I placed in the top one percent of all students across Canada in the 2012 University of Waterloo Avogadro Chemistry Exam, and in the top five percent in the 2012 University of Waterloo Chem 13 News Exam.

In addition to my academic pursuits, I assumed leadership roles within my school. I was involved in my school’s music program as a principal violinist, participating in three ensembles and performing across Ottawa and Canada in Kiwanis Music Festival competitions and events. I was also inspired by my Chinese-Canadian heritage to lead my school’s cultural organization and to share my experiences with my peers. Each year, I organized the International Gala, a cultural community talent show and ethnic food potluck, to raise funds for World Vision’s child sponsorship program and to continue to support two children from Kenya and Brazil. I was also a member of my school’s badminton team, where I competed across the city and mentored younger players. As a member of Trivia Club, I also organized and hosted community trivia events including Trivia Night and Quizbowl tournaments for Ottawa schools, and represented my school in national and international competitions.

Outside of school, I was a lab research assistant at the University of Ottawa, where I assisted Professor Laurie Chan and his colleagues in biology research in the field of environmental toxicology. As well, I coached badminton at the Soong Badminton Academy. I mentored thirty children in an after-school program, and led drills and activities for the players. As a participant of the 2012 Shad Valley program at the University of British Columbia, I led a group of ten students to develop a winning business plan for a healthy living venture, and represented the team in the Entrepreneurship Cup competition. Following a month at Shad Valley, I was offered an internship position with Martello Technologies, where I spent a month working on the marketing team promoting telecommunications products by creating a website and videos and organizing trade events.

Throughout high school, I have balanced my schoolwork with my extracurricular and community

involvement activities, being equally committed to both. In all of my personal achievements, I demonstrated initiative and leadership, seeking responsibilities in all opportunities. The CFC Scholarship will provide a foundation from which I can continue grow as a student in university and in life.
这孩子的化学真棒! 学医的料儿。支持!
 
另一个建议是,在不改变奖励总额的前提下,设若干个小奖,扩大奖励面,以吸引更多的应届毕业生参加。例如,一等奖1名:$2,000; 二等奖1名:$1,000;三等奖20名:$100。
100块就不是奖学金了,就成征文比赛了
 
100块就不是奖学金了,就成征文比赛了

就是鼓励奖,让申请者不白花力气写征文。即使$2000恐怕也不属于大奖的范围,多少是个意思吧,不空手而归。有希望吸引每年有20名以上的申请者。前提条件是要规范奖学金的申请程序和评审办法。不要把详细个人信息在网上提前公布,获奖者简介和获奖理由,可以用总结的方式在获奖后公布。照目前的申请程序和做法恐怕只能吸引少量申请者。
 
就是鼓励奖,让申请者不白花力气写征文。即使$2000恐怕也不属于大奖的范围,多少是个意思吧,不空手而归。有希望吸引每年有20名以上的申请者。前提条件是要规范奖学金的申请程序和评审办法。不要把详细个人信息在网上提前公布,获奖者简介和获奖理由,可以用总结的方式在获奖后公布。照目前的申请程序和做法恐怕只能吸引少量申请者。
呵呵,鼓励奖
 
经过慎重考虑, 并结合各位朋友及家长的意见,我们已经将申请者的名字隐去, 只保留申请信并编号。

今年是CFC 奖学金的第二届, 经验还不够丰富,我们也在摸索一个合适的评审方式。非常感谢大家的意见和建议,有了你们的帮助我们才能逐渐完善它。

你比中国驻华大使馆都明白事理。
 
这么好的孩子,我每个都支持! 帮不了评审,但至少表明对这些孩子的喜爱!
 
我们还在等待评委得评分结果, 获奖者名单公布时间将会推迟几天。
 
奖学金评审阶段已经结束, 我们将在今天下午或者明天公布获奖名单。敬请关注。
 
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