CFC 渥太华华裔高中应届毕业生奖学金-2013 - 第二阶段: 评审

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今年我们共收到九名优秀学生的申请,其中两名申请者已撤销申请.

很高兴收到这些高中朋友的申请,每一位申请者的成绩及申请信都是很优秀的,预祝你们赢取CFC奖学金。
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1.
As an active member of my high school and neighbourhood, I believe that the CFC Scholarship can help me achieve my career goals as I pursue a business education at the Wharton School of the University of Pennsylvania.

In high school, I excelled in my rigorous classes. I obtained the top marks in a variety of courses including science, Canadian history, strings music, geography, French, European history, and statistics. To demonstrate my interest in the sciences and social sciences, I sought enrichment by completing six Advanced Placement exams in addition to my curriculum requirements: English Language and Composition, European History, Statistics, Biology, Macroeconomics, and Microeconomics. I also participated in science competitions across Canada—I placed in the top one percent of all students across Canada in the 2012 University of Waterloo Avogadro Chemistry Exam, and in the top five percent in the 2012 University of Waterloo Chem 13 News Exam.

In addition to my academic pursuits, I assumed leadership roles within my school. I was involved in my school’s music program as a principal violinist, participating in three ensembles and performing across Ottawa and Canada in Kiwanis Music Festival competitions and events. I was also inspired by my Chinese-Canadian heritage to lead my school’s cultural organization and to share my experiences with my peers. Each year, I organized the International Gala, a cultural community talent show and ethnic food potluck, to raise funds for World Vision’s child sponsorship program and to continue to support two children from Kenya and Brazil. I was also a member of my school’s badminton team, where I competed across the city and mentored younger players. As a member of Trivia Club, I also organized and hosted community trivia events including Trivia Night and Quizbowl tournaments for Ottawa schools, and represented my school in national and international competitions.

Outside of school, I was a lab research assistant at the University of Ottawa, where I assisted Professor Laurie Chan and his colleagues in biology research in the field of environmental toxicology. As well, I coached badminton at the Soong Badminton Academy. I mentored thirty children in an after-school program, and led drills and activities for the players. As a participant of the 2012 Shad Valley program at the University of British Columbia, I led a group of ten students to develop a winning business plan for a healthy living venture, and represented the team in the Entrepreneurship Cup competition. Following a month at Shad Valley, I was offered an internship position with Martello Technologies, where I spent a month working on the marketing team promoting telecommunications products by creating a website and videos and organizing trade events.

Throughout high school, I have balanced my schoolwork with my extracurricular and community

involvement activities, being equally committed to both. In all of my personal achievements, I demonstrated initiative and leadership, seeking responsibilities in all opportunities. The CFC Scholarship will provide a foundation from which I can continue grow as a student in university and in life.
 
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Singing, piano, debate club, and Cappies Critics Team have been my main extracurricular activities this year. For singing, I have been on my school’s vocal jazz group, the C-Flats, all throughout high school. Each year, we go to the Heritage Music Festival at various cities around North America and win gold each time. This year, I personally won the Maestro Solo Award on top of winning gold with the group. In addition, I have taken private lessons since I was eight. Currently, I study under Yoriko Tanno-Kimmons, a voice professor at the University of Ottawa. I have sung at various Chinese community events, like at Chinese New Year galas, or Christmas parties at Apage Chinese Alliance Church. As for piano, I have been playing since I was six, and am currently at grade 10 RCM level. My continuous debate commitments started in grade 9. I have tended various tournaments in and out of the city, like the Carleton, and the McGill Debate tournament.

One of my more proactive achievements this year has been the running of my Cappies Critics Team this year. Cappies is an inter-scholastic program that I am now leading at my school. In this program, students watch and write reviews on productions from other schools. With my school board opposing Bill-115, the club was never supposed to have materialized. However, after many phone calls, meetings and emails, I succeeded in starting the club, and am the lead critic. I have been published four times in the Ottawa Citizen newspaper, twice for full reviews. Last year was my first year being on the team, and we won the Best Critics Team Award. This year, we were again nominated, and I was also nominated for being the Best Female Critic.

Concurrent to my many extracurricular pursuits, I have just finished my final year in the International Baccalaureate (IB) Diploma Programme. This rigorous academic programme has an attrition rate of about 50% at my school; nevertheless, I remain one of the successful individuals completing it while earning silver award for the past three years. On top of that, I have received my French Immersion Certificate. From when I was in kindergarten till grade 10, I also attended Chinese School.

Finally, some of my volunteering commitments include working at the Cedarview Alliance Church Nursery for two years, tutoring a student weekly, regularly volunteering at the Beacon Hill Retirement Home during the year of 2012, and helping with the “China Canadian Diplomatic Relationship-40 Year Celebration” every day for a week in 2010. I am also interested in bettering the global community. For that reason, I had a part-time job in 2011, and with the money I earned, sponsored a child in Africa through Plan for two years.

In conclusion, I find myself to be a well-rounded student with many extracurricular activities and achievements who leads an active volunteer life and remains close to my Chinese heritage. For that reason, I believe I should be a CFC Scholarship recipient.
 
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In a commencement address at Stanford University, Steve Jobs described his journey through life to be, not a clear straight path to success, but a chaotic adventure of unpredictable turns. However, after “connecting the dots” of countless unexpected events, he eventually realized a pattern. By following the light of passion on the path ahead, he walked upon the answer to his role as a piece in the puzzle of the world – technological entrepreneurship.

I respect the CEO and Chairman of Apple to be a man of inner truth. He didn’t care about what other people claimed was “the common norm” or “the right way”. As pioneer of the modern car, American industrialist Henry Ford said, “If I had asked other people what to do, they would’ve told me to make faster horses.” Jobs was a changemaker and revolutionary. He followed what he truly loved deep down, and persevered with integrity to his beliefs of complete dedication to scientific innovation, the sacrifice of the self to serve society’s needs and humanity’s benefit.

Throughout these past years, I blindly wallowed through the darkness of murky ripples, without a goal. And I didn’t need a direction, because the human heart was the most accurate compass to happiness and well-being ever invented.

Looking down at the clear waters below me right now and reflecting upon the most precious personal memories that illuminated my present self, I realized that like Steve Jobs, I am a technological entrepreneur. Whether it was human intuition or supernatural fate, I do not know, but the fact remains – as should be evident in the following two lists of awards and extracurriculars – that some omnipotent force has driven me to participate in scientific and leadership-oriented activities various in nature but all tending toward a singularity in the far distance.

Awards and Achievements

1. United States of America Computing Olympiad (USACO), Open Contest 2012
Gold Division, 1st Place in Canada
2. Intel International Science and Engineering Fair (ISEF), 2013
3rd Place Grand Award (Computer Science); IEEE Computer Society (Third Award)
3. Loran Scholarship for Leadership, Service, and Community
Provincial Award
4. Canada Wide Virtual Science Fair, 2012
1st Place National Award (Summa Cum Laude Award), Transport Canada Special Award
5. DWITE Programming Competition, 2011-2012
National Champion among 3914 competitors
6. Canadian Senior Mathematics Contest, 2011
National Top 6-30 (Group 2), National Champion Team
7. Waterloo Hypatia Math Contest, 2012
National Gold Standard

Extracurricular Activities

Team Leader, Tour Guide, Volunteer Committee, Youth Representative, Media Translator
at Ottawa Chinese Community Service Center (OCCSC)
With the intent of teaching basic computer skills to seniors, I became a volunteer instructor at the Ottawa Chinese Community Center since 2009. Since, I have taught computer usage skills to immigrant Chinese seniors, in addition to speaking, planning, organizing, and executing events for volunteers and guests.

Student Senator
at Lisgar Collegiate Institute
As elected representative of my school to represent Lisgar at the Ottawa-Carleton District School Board, I have discussed and contributed in discussions about socio-political issues affecting students across the board.

Co-Head
at Lisgar Computer Club
In ninth grade, I realized many students had already mastered the content taught in our computer science classes and needed hands-on enrichment. I thus created our three main departments of Contest Training, Network and Security, and Game Design. As a cooperative and self-nurturing community, we have taught programming languages and university-level algorithms to Lisgar students for over two years. We have led Lisgar to achieve numerous honours and awards in provincial and national-level programming competitions.

Founder and Co-head
at Lisgar Happiness Association
We founded the club to enlighten students on positive psychology, help relieve stress, teach self-management through cathartic activities, and draw out composure and esteem in achieving self-actualization by the highest level in Abraham Maslow’s hierarchy of needs. Our annual lectures include goal-setting, motivation, emotional intelligence, and leadership.

Essay (Part II)

High school graduation may be the end of four years, but for many students, it is also the beginning of much more. I hope to continue this journey with the support of comefromchina.com, the most valuable and important network for Chinese people in our region. As one of the most prestigious fellowships in our community, the CFC Scholarship grants students the honour and endowment to represent local society as ambassador and role model to younger students. I wish to help you in our common vision for the betterment of present well-being and future education.
 
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My life so far has been taking on challenges one after another. Born in China, I moved to Japan with my family at six. After living there for eight years during which I experienced learning a new language and culture, my family decided to move again - this time to Canada. At 14, learning two new languages was much harder than it had been before. Everyday became a struggle. Everything - from taking notes to talking with friends - struck me with the pain of not knowing English and French. Slowly I worked my way up, however, and slowly I absorbed the languages. I did not hesitate to put extra effort into English, French and academics in general, because that was the best way for anyone to learn new languages, and the only way for me to do well in school. I might have sacrificed the more fun things I could have done in my teenage years, but I am proud to have gone through the hard work.

Even though academics have always been a priority for me, I never wanted to limit myself to it. Throughout my high school years, I have played competitive table tennis, with achievements such as representing Montreal in Jeux du Quebec, a provincial athletic event and coming to the fourth place in the Quebec Junior Championship. I also have various volunteer experiences at places such as festivals, where I helped run events, a refugee house, where I used my own experience to help new comers/refugees to settle down in Canada. Moreover, I have been working at Kumon, a learning centre for children, for the past two years. There, I mark worksheets, teach children math and reading, talk to parents, enter data into computer, etc. These things helped me acquire organizational and communication skills. All the extracurricular activities have been challenging, but everyone of them has improved me in some ways.

One other challenge that I'm facing right now is raising my little brother, who was just born one and a half year ago. Because my dad works in China, I often have to help my mom look after him. And that task has become increasingly difficult as he grows and becomes more active. For example, when my mom is cooking, I have to babysit him and draw his attention. When he is sick and cries during night, I often have to wake up to help my mom. It goes without saying that his presence has greatly affected my life, but these days I start to think that this experience can have benefits to me. Like any challenges I mentioned earlier, this one too, should help me become a stronger, more knowledgeable and responsible person.

Having gone through obstacles, I have confidence in myself to do well in University. Whatever challenges I'll have to face, I'm ready.
 
5.
Numbers define me.

Yes, I did rank 8th in Canada on the Canadian Math Olympiad 2013 (my third year qualifying), 99.96th percentile nationally on the Sir Isaac Newton Physics contest, 3rd in the nation on the Avogadro Chemistry Exam, 2nd in Ontario in the province-wide Sprott Business Competition, and 5th in Canada on the AMC 12A 2013 (making me a 3-time qualifier to the AIME), only to name a fraction of all my contest achievements where I ranked the absolute highest in Ottawa. My academic record does show consecutive 100s in math. These achievements and others have won me the L.W. Rentner Memorial Award at graduation, for being the most outstanding mathematician in Lisgar Collegiate Institute, and the University of Rochester’s Bausch and Lomb honourary science award, a $68,000 scholarship. I was also one of the elite 22 young high school mathematicians invited to the CMS National Math Camp 2011, a group identified as potential Team Canada members. But those are not the only numbers that define me, because after all, where is the person behind it?

I like numbers, and I like math. I strive to bring life to these symbols, and as the head of Math Club, when I teach other students about the beauty and elegance of clever manipulations, I also try to show them the significance of the result and how to think about them. I strive to apply my math skills in other areas: giving presentations about stocks and derivatives to the Lisgar Business Venture Club as President, working out the physics of irradiators as an intern at Nordion Inc, researching and innovating a mathematical solution to traffic congestion (I wrote an essay that analysed traffic jams and that advocated an original solution. This work won me the E.V. Buchanan, a $30,000 scholarship to the University of Western Ontario).

But I also like working in numbers. For 6 years now I have played competitive club and school soccer, where I have shown teamwork and leadership. I became captain of the Lisgar Lords in Gr.10, and we contended in the OFSAA provincial championships the next year. Outside of sports, I have also contributed to school events as the Assistant Director of Fundraising of Student Council, and to modern medical research as an assistant researcher at the University of Ottawa Heart Institute.

I feel comfort in numbers. Thirteenth chords? Augmented sixth chords? They all come naturally to me, and my abilities in harmony allowed me to obtain my ARCT performer’s diploma in piano. I was also one of five Canadian Music Competition provincial finalists of 2012. I bring these skills to the Ottawa School of Speech and Drama, where I work as an accompanist and music teacher. In my favourite class I worked with a group of developmentally disabled adults, using music to encourage the students to be creative and to express themselves. One student began with a psychological fear of talking, and ended the class with the ability to uphold simple conversation! This was perhaps the most rewarding experience I have ever had.

As far as numbers go, I strive to be number 1 in all my endeavours. With the assistance of the CFC scholarship, I plan to fulfill my dream of conducting ground-breaking mathematical research with my time at Yale, while continuing to contribute to society by staying involved in my community and applying my skills to every opportunity that comes my way.
 
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I have always had a passion for music ever since I was a child. I started taking piano lessons at the age of five and completed grade 10 playing exam with First Class Honours at 13 years old. In school, I have been playing alto saxophone in concert bands for 6 years starting in middle school. In grade 9, I participated in the Capital Region Musicfest with the band and was rewarded a Silver medal. My success with the concert band continued with winning Gold medals at Musicfest in grades 10 and 11, both at the B500 level. Our grade eleven concert band was truly exceptional, as we were invited to Musicfest Nationals in 2012. We challenged ourselves by playing pieces at the B600 level, the most difficult category, and amazingly we were able to achieve another Gold medal at the B600 level. This is no doubt my greatest achievement in the 6 years of band experience. Although I started violin lessons at quite a late age 14, I was able to successfully pass the audition for the Ottawa Junior Youth Orchestra (OJYO) after only 1 year of practise. Taking weekly private lessons and joining OJYO have helped me improve immensely over my first 2 years playing violin. In grades 11 and 12, I joined the Ottawa Youth Orchestra (OYO) which is the most advanced ensemble in the Ottawa Youth Orchestra Academy. Each season, we hold about five concerts. My most memorable one is definitely our joint concert with the Ottawa Symphony Orchestra where we had the once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to perform “The Planets” by Gustav Holst on Southam Hall stage at the National Arts Center, a truly unforgettable experience. In my private studies, I am currently playing repertoire at grade 10 and ARCT levels after only 4 years of playing violin. I have also had many successes in academics with the rigorous International Baccalaureate program. I received Silver and Honours awards in Grades 9 and 10, respectively. I excelled in Grade 11 with another Silver medal as well as the Physics Excellence Award with a final mark of 100. I continued my academic achievements in Grade 12 with a 95.83 average in my top 6 courses. I successfully completed the program in May 2013 with predicted 7’s in higher level math, chemistry and physics. Apart from the curriculum, I’ve also scored the top 5% in the contests offered by Waterloo University such as the Cayley, Avogadro, and Euclid. In grade 11, I was chosen to represent Colonel By at the Math Horizons competition where our team won 1st place in the team competition and I won 1st place in the individual competition. I volunteered at the library bookstore for 2 years where I tended the cash register and organized/sold the books and enjoyed the fulfillment of giving to my community. This working experience has helped me build self-confidence. By helping others, I have also developed many new skills including communication, teamwork, time management, positive attitude and problem-solving.
 
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Three hours a day. Three hundred and sixty days a year. Twelve years. With nearly 10,800 hours spent on a piano bench, popular belief would qualify me as an “expert” in this domain. Music has taught me many things over the last decade of my life. Two of the long lasting lessons I have learned from music are the importance of perseverance and the value of bringing people together.

When I reflect on my journey, I often think about all things that music has given me. Through music, I have learned discipline and perseverance. I have experienced the satisfaction of hard work and I have discovered myself as a truly strong individual. I have discovered that strength lies not in the physical dimension, but in the fortitude of the mind. Though my many musical accomplishments include the likes of an ARCT piano degree, countless Kiwanis Music Festival trophies and scholarships, Canadian Music Competition provincial finalist, and ORMTA trophies, what I take away from this journey has more to do with the intrinsic qualities that lie below the surface than simply the triumphs in competition.

Music has provided me with a universal language to communicate with. It transcends language barriers, age difference and all social barriers in the world. My best memory was after a music club performance of Debussy’s “Feux-d’Artifice”, an elderly man came up to me and took my hand and told me that my performance really touched him and he could hear distant fireworks in my music. This moment touched me and made me realize that not only have I mastered discipline, but I have acquired a new language that brings together people of all walks of life. Music is my way of bringing people together and expressing thing that I cannot express through words.

Outside of music, I am an avid student of science. For me, math and science have always been extremely logical and interesting. My success in annual international Waterloo math competitions including silver and gold awards in the Fryer, Galois, and Hypatia really sparked my interest and motivated me to learn more about math. At school I have engaged in helping others with math and science as I am the coordinator of my school’s math tutoring club.
In the summer between my junior and my senior year, I participated in a program called Shad Valley International. For one month, I stayed on the campus of University of Waterloo and experienced one month of university level math lectures and science workshops. After an engaging month at Shad Valley, I had an internship at the Rare Genomics Institute. The Rare Genomics Institute is a non-profit organisation that helps patients with rare diseases. My work at the Rare Genomics Institute consisted of doing research on genetic biology and research on new and emerging biotechnologies. From this internship, I gained insight into the world of biotechnology and I found that I possessed a profound interest in this field of science.

With my education, I look to merge my creative musical instincts with my passion for science and math with a double degree in biological engineering and economics. My final decision of going to the California Institute of Technology was largely influenced by my interest in scientific research. This scholarship from CFC will allow me not only to pursue my passion at a world renowned institution, but it will also be a testimony to all the young women out there that we possess the ability to make a difference in the field of science and technology.
 
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为这些聪明而努力的孩子们鼓鼓掌!都很优秀
希望能看到更多在文史政治领域内出色de华人孩子
 
CFC 奖学金申请没啥别的,至少应该是纯中文。
我们的要求:
请提交一篇500字的短文(中英文均可)描述你取得的成就,以便于评委会对您的获奖资格进行合理的评估。该部分内容是我们进行评估的重要依据之一,如果此栏空缺,您的申请将不被予以考虑。因此,请务必尽量针对于您所希望申请的奖项进行描述,同时最好能提供确凿的证据。

是不是纯中文不重要。
 
我们的要求:
请提交一篇500字的短文(中英文均可)描述你取得的成就,以便于评委会对您的获奖资格进行合理的评估。该部分内容是我们进行评估的重要依据之一,如果此栏空缺,您的申请将不被予以考虑。因此,请务必尽量针对于您所希望申请的奖项进行描述,同时最好能提供确凿的证据。

是不是纯中文不重要。

我的意思是说

既然是CFC, come from china, 最基本的就应该是中文能力

在这边的小孩最不给力的就是中文基础/中文能力,你作为CFC应该focus on这点
 
我的意思是说

既然是CFC, come from china, 最基本的就应该是中文能力

在这边的小孩最不给力的就是中文基础/中文能力,你作为CFC应该focus on这点
你还没从征集标语的感觉中释放出来吧, 奖学金的目的是鼓励华裔优秀学生,不是给CFC 选代言人。
 
如果是我建立这个基金,非中文短文不收。繁简不限

cfc本身就是中文的,搞篇英文申请这不扯淡么,那点炎黄子孙的根儿都没了。
 
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