请帮忙修改一下这个小短文,明天考试要用的,谢谢

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Topic:What does Friendship mean to you? and explain your view about it.

What does friendship mean? There is no definite answer. An eternal theme in literature, friendship is also indispensable in daily life. Nobody can go through life without forming friendship -- one of the most valuable treasures lives has to offer. When we are lonesome, we need friends to cheer us up. When we are in trouble, we need friends to help us to solve our problems. Indeed, none of us can ever exist alone in the world.

It is an in-depth relationship combining trust, support, communication, loyalty, understanding, empathy, and intimacy. Aspects of life that all of us crave.

"I'm home. I can relax now." I think that's what a friendship should be.

Knowing how precious friendship is, we should be careful in the choice of friends. We had better make friends with not only people who are well-informed but people who are of good character as well. On the other hand, we must keep away from people who are of bad character, such as those who are unreliable, dishonest, and selfish. Though we can never have too many friends, we must tell good friends from bad ones.

"The best kind a friend is the one you could sit on a porch, swing with, never say a word, and then walk away feeling like that was the best conversation you've had."
 
我觉得你文章的开头非常好,但是似乎并没有论证你的观点。而且我自始至终也没有搞明白你对友谊的观点到底是什么。
 
写的不错,不过我不明白"I'm home. I can relax now." I think that's what a friendship should be.

是什么意思...还有你好象一直在解释什么是FRIENDSHIP但没有说出THE TOPIC
 
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