CFC最新公司形象宣传页

[Weir]

it's neither a sentence nor consistent with the Chinese line above

..

Online platform serving Ottawa Chinese community over 12 years (.)

should remove the period, it's not a sentence and not consistent with the Chinese line above.

 

[Riven]

文字还没看，图片怎么看着象护照夹或者厚皮本的封面，是不是太庄重了？

商业需要庄重， 不是儿童网站不能太活泼。

 

[Weir]

3 M， 我出钱找人写去。

。。

好啊， 如果谁写的没有错误并为大众认可， 我出30万CFC 刀。

 

[ccc]

哇！英语真好！这个 with respect to 我都不会这么用！

OR in respect to.

 

[ccc]

CFC online advertising has long been recognized by many local advertisers with respect to its wide coverage, highly efficient in marketing communication as well as the most effective in reaching target customers.

忽略文法，这句话，是否还有逻辑问题？

另外，应该是CFC online advertising还是Online advertising at CFC？

 

[asdfqwer]

哇！英语真好！这个 with respect to 我都不会这么用！

哦，这素人家小同学原文里的。我就给换个个地方。

 

[扣 扣]

觉得这 LOGO 光是中国地图单调了些

1. 可以这样： 后面远方上中国地图，前方上加拿大地图，中间加上两个地图的 morphing 过程在配上文字：CFC中文网

2. canada.ottawa 觉得换成 ottawa canada 就好了, 或者直接用 ottawa

西迈的主意不是挺好的，那个钱包的纵向俩边各变成俩个顺向波纹的曲线～～

浅咖啡色加银灰色变成浅墨绿加银灰色～～

适合社区的调子～～看起来有朝气～～

这个也挺好的，就是有点像７０岁的上等绅士，紧张严肃了点～～:blowzy:

 

[三句半]

文法错误不多，但多处用法不太地道。第二段尤其成问题。

In short CFC web advertising service delivers the highest "bang for your buck". For more than ten years, CFC has been growing with many advertisers and businesses by collaborating, interacting, and offering win-win solutions with them. CFC is firmly committed to bridge your business from start to success.

很好！

找个小瑕，Committed to 后面要跟名词或动名词，...is committed to bridging...

 

[ccc]

我的感觉是设计得复杂了点。网页简洁最好，打开速度快。

 

[ccc]

很好！

找个小瑕，Committed to 后面要跟名词或动名词，...is committed to bridging...

CFC is firmly committed to bridge your business from start to success.

是什么意思？

Isn't it Okay to simply say, "CFC is committed to our clients' success."

 

[三句半]

CFC is firmly committed to bridge your business from start to success.

是什么意思？

Isn't it Okay to simply say, "CFC is committed to our clients' success."

我更喜欢你的版本。

 

[g哦哦的你gh台]

不懂鸟语的掩面飘过 。。。

 

[asdfqwer]

很好！

找个小瑕，Committed to 后面要跟名词或动名词，...is committed to bridging...

多谢指正。bridge...是原文里的，因此没注意。:blowzy:

 

[viens_de_la_chine]

My two cents:
Founded in July 2000, CFC (Come From China) has been the most popular Chinese online service provider in Canada’s National Capital Region, with the largest number of registered users and highest daily traffic volume. It owns and operates four online business units, namely CFC Forum (http://bbs.comefromchina.com/), CFC Yellow Pages (http://www.comefromchina.com/ottawa), CFC Encyclopedia(www.comefromchina.org), and CFC Social Network (www.comefromchina.net). Comprehensive online services are provided, including News, Community Forum, Business Advertising, Yellow Pages, and Community Events Planning, serving 1000 businesses and hundreds of thousands of international students and new immigrants coming from China, among which nearly 100,000 users are registered.

CFC online advertising has long been recognized by many local advertisers with respect to its wide coverage, highly efficient marketing communication as well as its highly effectiveness at reaching target customers. In short, it offers the best “value-for-money” service for advertisers. First, CFC owns comefromchina.com which has been the most well-known Chinese website for almost a decade and is the primary information source for the majority of Chinese in National Capital Region. second, through its four business units, CFC tailors its information services and offers interactive programs to a variety of users with different needs. As such, based on their market demand and Return on Investment, businesses can select proper CFC advertising channels to effectively target potential customers. Last but not least, CFC web advertising has a unique advantage of offering continuous 24/7/365 advertising service.

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing substantially together with many of its business advertisers and partners by offering win-win solutions through collaboration and interaction. CFC is your bridge to success!


More suggestions:
1. find a local Canadian to read it and see how he feels about the english version of your "about us";

2. keep your definitions consistent. CFC is the name of your business. it is not comefromchina.com anymore since you included comefromchina.org and comefromchina.net under CFC.

3. Keep your sentences clean and precise.

 

[ccc]

My two cents:
Founded in July 2000, CFC (Come From China) has been the most popular Chinese online service provider in Canada’s National Capital Region, with the largest number of registered users and highest daily traffic volume. It owns and operates four online business units, namely CFC Forum (http://bbs.comefromchina.com/), CFC Yellow Pages (http://www.comefromchina.com/ottawa), CFC Encyclopedia(www.comefromchina.org), and CFC Social Network (www.comefromchina.net). Comprehensive online services are provided, including News, Community Forum, Business Advertising, Yellow Pages, and Community Events Planning, serving 1000 businesses and hundreds of thousands of international students and new immigrants coming from China, among which nearly 100,000 users are registered.

CFC online advertising has long been recognized by many local advertisers with respect to its wide coverage, highly efficient marketing communication as well as its highly effectiveness at reaching target customers. In short, it offers the best “value-for-money” service for advertisers. First, CFC owns comefromchina.com which has been the most well-known Chinese website for almost a decade and is the primary information source for the majority of Chinese in National Capital Region. second, through its four business units, CFC tailors its information services and offers interactive programs to a variety of users with different needs. As such, based on their market demand and Return on Investment, businesses can select proper CFC advertising channels to effectively target potential customers. Last but not least, CFC web advertising has a unique advantage of offering continuous 24/7/365 advertising service.

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing substantially together with many of its business advertisers and partners by offering win-win solutions through collaboration and interaction. CFC is your bridge to success!


More suggestions:
1. find a local Canadian to read it and see how he feels about the english version of your "about us";

2. keep your definitions consistent. CFC is the name of your business. it is not comefromchina.com anymore since you included comefromchina.org and comefromchina.net under CFC.

3. Keep your sentences clean and precise.

My one cent:


Online advertising at CFC has long been recognized by many local businesses as being highly efficient in marketing communications, highly effective in reaching targeted customers, and the best “value-for-money”service.

For a decade, comefromchina.com has been the most popular Chinese website in the National Capital Region. It is the primary source of information for the local Chinese community. Through its four business units, CFC tailors its information services to offer interactive programs to a variety of users with different needs.

Therefore, your business can choose the right CFC advertising channel to effectively target potential customers. The CFC website provides you with a unique 24/7 advertising service.