CFC最新公司形象宣传页

[小 篆]

老大你闲啊？

2瓶茅台一只烤鸭我跟小傻给你搞定！

当然你也可以叫几个人一起喝蹭酒，不过不能喝我们内俩瓶！:blowzy:

老枪，你还真别劝老大。
你看我就睃了一眼，找了个漏掉的字母，那天被你骗走的1万刀就又回来了，真的是“千金散尽还复来”，一散一复来的还得了许多乐子，这不是好得很吗？

另外，自打我被你骗后，又有两人给我送钱，俺又小有积蓄了，准备存着等你下次来骗啊。

 

[Riven]

好多句子整体上读起来别扭，更改一两处还是不能改变表达的整体风格。


建议让荞麦或懒猫重新起草。

好啊， 如果谁写的没有错误并为大众认可， 我出30万CFC 刀。

 

[Riven]

Y输给你50万？:blink: 又玩欧饮啦？ 一个赌博诈骗犯罪集团作案的线路清晰了，有给筹款的，有设局的，有收钱的，还有撒钱的。。。

上次冰球我赌的是纽约赢

 

[三句半]

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing with many advertisers and businesses by collaborating, interacting, and offering win-win solutions with them.


后面的with them多余了。

 

[Riven]

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing with many advertisers and businesses by collaborating, interacting, and offering win-win solutions with them.


后面的with them多余了。

直接去掉？

 

[uglyducking]

文字俺不懂，图片谁做的？:blowzy: 咋像四海一家的帐单夹呢？:blowzy: 靠，还有插信用卡的地方。能不能再请小鸭给弄得精致点？倒倒角什么的？ 加点曲线？你介个有点像奔驰车的外形，平板中带点骨感，能不能往老魏家的奥迪上靠靠？

这帐单夹是定制的。需要想象力地。
我可不敢做搬门农夫的事儿。:blink:

 

[扣 扣]

而不同颜色的钱包也有不同的意义

红色钱包 ：红色代表赤字的意思，也就是很容易把钱花光，无法存钱。

黄色钱包：黄色代表钱财，是最好的钱包颜色了。

蓝色钱包：蓝色代表水，意思是钱会像流水一样的流掉，也是一种不适合钱包的颜色。

黑色钱包：代表可以守住，不轻易让钱财损失。

咖啡色钱包：代表可以守住，不轻易让钱财损失。
:blowzy:

 

[Riven]

同一句, 这个COMMUNITIES, 有必要复数吗?

单数也显得单薄, 反正地球人都知道中国人一贯拉帮结伙, 干脆,这末加个ALL LOCAL写:

our best choice of online advertising to target all local Chinese communities.



our best choice of online advertising to target Chinese communities


算上前面的"THE", 两万了啊.
先兑现了说, 后边还有的改.

需要其他人复议。

 

[ccc]

有复议的么

cut

 

[ccc]

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing with many advertisers and businesses by collaborating, interacting, and offering win-win solutions with them.


后面的with them多余了。

直接去掉？

Yes, cut "with them".

You might want 三句半 to do a quick editorial pass on everything.

 

[三句半]

直接去掉？

简单改一两个地方不行。要是我说就介样：

For more than ten years, CFC has been growing up together with our business clients. Our mission is to bring win-win solutions to our customers with collaborations, interactions, and cooperation.

 

[ccc]

同意。靠小改不成，这文字必须打回去重来。

 

[西迈]

Comefromchina.com(CFC) is the largest among all Chinese websites in Capital Region

介个有人砸过木有? 把among all 去掉。
Comefromchina.com(CFC) is the largest Chinese website in Capital Region

 

[ccc]

好啊， 如果谁写的没有错误并为大众认可， 我出30万CFC 刀。

让三句半改写吧。

 

[ccc]

Comefromchina.com(CFC) is the largest among all Chinese websites in Capital Region

介个有人砸过木有? 把among all 去掉。

The largest "what"?

My 2 cents:

comefromchina.com (CFC) is the largest Chinese xxxxx in the National Capital Region.